Dream

[StaRgaZer]

I met you again last night in my dreams
Where the moon bends, casts its face on the stream
Next to a misty, emerald haven of trees
In synchronicity, indwelled with the breeze
Sapphire ponds as deep as your eyes
Horizon beyond seeps into the sky
Dew covered ferns, awake and agleam
Reality returns, in breaks a sunbeam

[Jedi]

That's a good poem, I wanted it to keep going.

[Genesis]

Yea, the poem was great, but it just kinda left you wanting more.

[StaRgaZer]

Usually I think that when you keep poems short it keeps the meaning intact, but I agree with you both and as I was posting this I thought it was definitely coming to a hasty end... So,

I met you again last night in my dreams
Where the moon bends, casts it's face on the streams
Next to a misty, emerald haven of trees
In synchronicity, endwelled with the breeze

Sapphire ponds as deep as your eyes
Horizon beyond seeps into the sky
Dew covered ferns line the forest floor
Sleepy ivy turns to entwine the sycamore

Souls unveiled I released my inhibitions
Deeply inhaled and increased my euphoric condition
Together we soared in the elation we'd found
Through downpoured energy, vibration, and sound

We traveled to a place where color turns to white
And unraveled time and space beneath the twilight
Hand in hand we explored our memories reality
A dreamland aboard our unified individuality

Reality returned as in broke a sunbeam
Alone I yearn to evoke my dream
Though I smile as I rise because I know you are there
One day we we'll harmonize and flow through the air

.....Through the willow the wind blows fate, to dance among the stars - Spinning freely I will wait, and find you wherever you are


So, better before or after the addition?

[Genesis]

Definitely after!! Reading the rest, I could really goto the place you depicted.
You've got real talant. I look foward to your next post.

[Image]

...awesome...!!! I liked the full length, most definitely. Though, it was great as a "short story," the rest was what made the poem most profound. I loved every word...great job!

[StaRgaZer]

Thanks for the feedback

[JIMBEAN]

wow.. this is the first thread ive read from you. i love it when someone inspires me to write especially when its from somthing ive read. did a promp evaluation but ill break it down when i have time...